The Development of a Poem: Sonnet II

For those who find these things interesting, I am showing my first published draft of Sonnet II by its present draft. It is something to fill the Thanksgiving Day blog post void. 🙂 Criticism is always welcome.

Present Draft:

Away went Earth’s once White & vestal forms—
Defiled—ravished when Sin’s First Seed was sown;
And now, through Pangs She strains—through wars & storms,
Awaiting Him whose Kin bear Hope, She groans;

Not Her alone, but we the Sons of God,
Whose father’s Seed steeps our marrow & bones;
In Christ, we taste Rest on this war-torn Sod,
We taste but faintly, and with Her we groan;

Although in us we find the Spirit’s hand,
We pray not the Objectives of the Throne,
Nor for the Paths of Love the Father’s planned;
Thus for Harmony Divine, the Spirit groans;

Our Good, we know, is our Father’s delight,
And patiently wait till Faith yields to Sight.

~Romans 8:19-28

First Published Draft:

Away went Her once White & blushing forms–
Defiled; ravished when Sin’s First Seed was sown;
And now, through Pangs She strains–through wars & storms,
Awaiting Him whose Sons bear Hope, She groans;

Not Her alone, but we the Sons of God,
Whose father’s Seed steeps our marrow & bone,
In Christ, we taste Rest on this hostile Sod,
We taste here blindly, and with Her we groan;

And though in us we find the Spirit’s hand,
We pray not the Intentions of the Throne,
Nor the Paths of Love our Father has planned;
For our Divine Harmony, the Spirit groans;

We know our Good is the Father’s delight,
And patiently wait till Faith yields to Sight.

~Romans 8:19-28



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5 replies

  1. I see poetry Thursday was of some benefit to you. Good job. Don't forsake free/blank verse though, it is like exercising your freedom in Christ.

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  2. Thanks. I couldn't've done it without go ol' Robert and Robert Frost. Good times.

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  3. Hey, do you mind if we put the finished product on the YAM Blog?

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  4. Not at all.

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  5. I probably should just get text messaging for my phone. That would probably be easier.

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